[美] James Richardson《主谓宾》

tommyleea

#《纽约客》译诗#  詹姆斯.理查森《主谓宾》(James Richardson's "Subject, Verb, Object".  挺好玩儿的诗。
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SUBJECT, VERB, OBJECT
主谓宾

I is not ego, not the sum
“我”不是自己，不是你
of your unique experiences,
个人经历的总和，
just, democratically,
公平地说，不过是
whoever’s talking,
一个说话的人，
a kind of motel room,
就像旅馆的房间，
yours till the end—
可以说是你的 --
that is, of the sentence.
但到底有个期限。
The language, actually,
其实，这门语言
doesn’t think I’s important,
并没把“我”看得太重，
stressing, even in
就连那么
grandiose utterances—
有气魄的话 ---
e.g., I came
比如“我来，
I saw I conquered—
我见，我征服”---
the other syllables.
也没把“我”重读。
Oh, it’s a technical problem,
哦，当然，这是个
sure, the rhyme
技术问题，
on so-so-open
“果”、“火”、“我”
lie, cry, I
必须押韵，
harder to stitch tight
这可比补好
than the ozone
那臭氧层漏洞
hole in the sky.
还困难。
But worst is its plodding insistence—
但最怕它怎么都不肯停 ---
I, I, I—
“我、我、我”---
somebody huffing uphill,
吭哧吭哧地爬坡，
face red as a stop sign,
脸红得像“停”字牌，
scared by a doctor
有可能被医生吓到了，
or some He She It
也可能意外看见了
surprised in the mirror.
镜子里的“他她它”。

2007.12.3

闽中林木

我有些不同理解，试译一下。

SUBJECT, VERB, OBJECT    [美] James Richardson
主谓宾

我不是自我，不是
个人独特经历的总和，
民主地说，不过是
一个说话的人，
一个汽车旅馆的房间，
是你的，直到--
确切地说，句子结束。
其实语言，
并不认为我重要，
即使是伟大的
言论 ---
比如我来
我看见我征服---
强调的是其它音节。
哦，一个技术问题
当然了，给
扯得老远的
处，哭，吾押韵
比补好天空
臭氧层漏洞
还难。
但最可怕的是不懈的坚持 ---
我、我、我---
某人气喘吁吁地爬坡，
脸红得像停车标志牌，
被医生吓坏了
或被某个他她它
在镜子里显得惊讶。

2007.12.3

SUBJECT, VERB, OBJECT    James Richardson

I is not ego, not the sum
of your unique experiences,
just, democratically,
whoever’s talking,
a kind of motel room,
yours till the end—
that is, of the sentence.
The language, actually,
doesn’t think I’s important,
stressing, even in
grandiose utterances—
e.g., I came
I saw I conquered—
the other syllables.
Oh, it’s a technical problem,
sure, the rhyme
on so-so-open
lie, cry, I
harder to stitch tight
than the ozone
hole in the sky.
But worst is its plodding insistence—
I, I, I—
somebody huffing uphill,
face red as a stop sign,
scared by a doctor
or some He She It
surprised in the mirror.

2007.12.3

tommyleea

闽中林木 发表于 2014-8-20 06:58
我有些不同理解，试译一下。

SUBJECT, VERB, OBJECT    [美] James Richardson

谢谢分享，确实有几处理解不同。忘了说了，这首诗里的I，He, She, It, lie, cry原本都是斜体，可惜排版显示不出来。

星子安娜

very interesting poem. will check his other poems as well.

thanks for sharing.